Writing 101: Give and Take

“I waited for you,” He said. I waited a long time for you.”

 

“I know.”

 

A heavy silence passed between them. It had been nearly 10 years since they last saw each other. She never thought this day would come, he had waited eagerly for it. His eyes were searching hers, he needed an explanation.

 

“It was the hardest decision I ever had to make, but I had to stay for Marcie.”

 

“I wanted Marcie too.”

 

“I know,” She whimpered. “But he’s her father.”


Tears began to blur his vision but he never took his eyes off her.

 

“He’s a good Father.”

 

“Yeah but a shitty husband.” He replied.

 

“I had to do what I thought was best.”

 

“Best for who!” He shouted. “You and Marcie would have been happy with me! You were just scared!

 

The tear were rolling down her cheeks, she could no longer hold back.

 

“I’m sorry,” Was all she could manage to get out.

 

“I’m sorry too, I’m sorry that you had more fear of him than love for me.”

 

Pulling her into his arms he stroked her hair. They held their embrace as she gathered herself.

 

“Forgive me.”She said.

 

Closing his eyes, he kissed her gently on the forehead.

 

“Of course,” He replied “Goodbye Jenny.”

 

“Goodbye David.”

 

 

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8 thoughts on “Writing 101: Give and Take

  1. I personally think you could have enhanced this by letting your readers know who was saying what. For awhile, as I was reading it, I was confused to that fact. It is very good just needs a tiny bit of tweaking.

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